You sit and watch,
Scared but you must be strong for them
You have to decide.
Protection.
Facing him
You have no chances for victory.
You face certain death
But you know that they are saved.
If I was to comment on your poem, I would focus on: The rhythm of the poem, and how it flows, because of the effect it has on the feel and emotion of the poem.
I would focus on the way you use emotion to make the people feel empathy for the cheetah and her bravery.
Another main thing that I would focus on if commenting on your poem would be the use of the second person. This make sit seem as if the poem is on a much more personal scale.
If I was to comment on your poem, I would focus on:
ReplyDeleteThe rhythm of the poem, and how it flows, because of the effect it has on the feel and emotion of the poem.
I would focus on the way you use emotion to make the people feel empathy for the cheetah and her bravery.
Another main thing that I would focus on if commenting on your poem would be the use of the second person. This make sit seem as if the poem is on a much more personal scale.